Yes, I've been writing. I know I said I wasn't going to until after the move. I was wrong. I'm deep into "the mess in the middle" as some writers call it. Revising, twisting the plot and trying to get everyone from the beginning to the ending in a way that makes sense without being predictable. It's frustrating, because every time I think I know what happens next, something else happens. At least things are happening. But my mind keeps going back to the beginning. I've re-written it several times and will re-write it again later. But I keep thinking about it. Usually that means I screwed up somewhere. So I thought I'd ask for some feedback from the
demented discerning few of you who still read this blog.
Correct my grammar and spelling if you must, but that's not my concern right now. I want to know: Does it make sense? Do you care about these characters? Do you want to know what happens next? Would you keep reading?
Please do not say, "Of course I'd read it, you wrote it." My mom is the only one allowed to say that. Pretend you have no idea who wrote it. It's not a romance, though there is sexual tension between two of the main characters. It's a thriller. You're in a bookstore and you pick it up and turn to the first page. What do you think? If you don't want to comment on the blog, send me an email: [click here] Yes, you over there in the corner. I want your opinion. You don't have to be nice. Really. [BTW, I tried to get rid of the double-space formatting so this wouldn't be so long, but it's late and I'm too impatient to keep messing with it.]
I'm not posting this anywhere else and I'm only going to leave it up for maybe a day. Then probably I'm going to delete the excerpt part of it. I don't know why, I'm strange that way. If you miss it, so sorry. Oh, and I changed the title. Here it is:
7/9/08, 12:45 AM, edited to add:
Okay, so I said I'd leave it up for maybe a day and I did.
Thank you so much to everyone who commented here and sent email. The input has given me much to ponder and it will help immensely in the re-write. Yeah, I'm going to take it apart and do it again. And again. Whatever it takes.
The hardest part of writing -- and the best part, in my opinion -- is editing. I think the trick is to keep it fresh and not lose your voice or your consistency, while at the same time making it stronger and more clear. Unless, of course, you're misleading people on purpose. [grin]
I liked one of the earlier versions I wrote of the scene with Annie, but it was mostly "telling." I remember thinking it would be a lot of work to fix that scene and maybe I could do it another way. Well, the other way is just not doing it for me. So I'm going back to the earlier version to see what I can salvage. Maybe I'll post it again once I'm done. Then you all can tell me whether you think it's an improvement. Or point out where I've screwed it up even worse.
In the meantime, I'm removing the excerpt from this post but leaving the comments. I know I really dislike it when someone blithely deletes my writing for no good reason and I'm going to assume others feel the same. Besides, everything you all have said is far too important to me not to leave it just as it is.
Again, thank you for your help.